Table for three

They didn’t come today. They had been coming every day, and the tips just seemed to grow. An elderly couple and a young stud with a neck tattoo. Whatever. Bobbi wasn’t born yesterday, and if the couple needed help to hit the high notes these days, she wasn’t going to judge.

Ah well, she was philosophical, nothing lasts forever. But… ah, those tips!

“Excuse me, Bobbi?”

Turning around, she saw a middle aged couple pushing a withered, ancient old geezer in a wheelchair. Despite the hot weather, the old man was wearing a thick scarf pulled high.

“Table for three?”


(word count 100)

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18 thoughts on “Table for three

    1. Thanks for reading 🙂

      In my head it seemed super obvious 🙂 basically i envisaged the elderly couple trapping the youth with money & then feasting off his youth, taking it for themselves…

      Ah well, next time 🙂
      Cheers
      KT

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      1. It needed a little bit more … indication. Maybe showing them coming in one day, looking ancient. Then another day and hey, I thought he used to walk with a cane? Hey I thought she was missing teeth last time?

        I think you constricted yourself with the 100 words here! Write more! The idea is excellent, the writing is good, but lacking just the little hints that would have turned it truly creepy.

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  1. That’s a really great idea. I like how you’ve used Bobbi’s point of view to tell the story – her concern about tips and acceptance of the situation: ‘Whatever.’ The neck tattoo’s an interesting touch. I’m assuming the old geezer’s scarf is covering the same tattoo.

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  2. Wildbilbo, That was creepy. O_o They must be some kind of supernaturals. I’m surprised they came back to the same cafe. Of course, who would believe it or care to try to do anything. Good and well-written story for Halloween. 🙂 — Susan

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    1. Thanks Suzanne – I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂
      I envisaged them as supernaturals… not so much as, say, vampires, but in the same vein (excuse the pun).

      Thanks for reading.
      KT

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