La petite mort en soie

PHOTO PROMPT – Copyright – Douglas M. MacIlroy

He shudders under the potency of her touch; flesh responding involuntarily, rebelliously. His heart quickens at each tender, feather-light caress brushing against his side. Breath becomes shallow and urgent as he is enveloped; gasping, panting as she controls him utterly. Her intoxicating kiss robs him of strength, silken bonds as restraining steel shackles.

He is at her mercy, but she is merciless. She explores his body, touching and tasting him as she is lost in the moment. Kisses graduate in step with her passion, soft tickling, to nibbling, on to painful biting. Each sensation building, escalating to climax…

She penetrates.

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(100 words)

‘La petite mort en soie’ – or ‘The little death in silk’

Or at least that’s what Google translate tells me – if this is wrong, let me know, I can change it.

A Friday Fictioneer’s challenge set by Rochelle – write a 100 word story based on the photo prompt (which I thought was particularly cool this week – nice work Doug). This link will take you to the other stories, and I encourage you to check them out. Actually, I encourage you to give the Fictioneer’s a try – it’s a very positive community to help develop writing skills.

And developing writing skills was the whole point of my post today. I have been meaning to try my hand at an ‘erotic’ story, but I’ll admit I have shied away so far. Erotic fiction can be truly, truly awful, even when it’s done by professional writers. I don’t know how many times I have been shunted out of the enjoyment of a book by a disappointingly written sex scene. ‘Throbbing members’, ‘turgid appendage’ or ‘moist orifices’ make great band names, but can be tiresome and banal tropes when used in writing.

Heh, I think that using those words might generate some unusual Google traffic…

So the short tale above is my practice, my ‘Fifty Shades of Spider’ if you will. I tried for (as I often do) a dual meaning – a story that could be a sensual dominatrix session or a quite literal discussion of a spider eating a cockroach. ‘Sex as a form violence’ is a frequently used cliché in writing erotica, so I attempted to get a little more original by working a reversal of the traditional gender roles – the woman in control, the man as the penetrated. Given the sexual habits of spiders, this was an easy association to make.

Please feel free to let me know any criticisms in the comments. Does this story work? Does it read well, or was it painfully trite? Did I get the dual meanings across? This was practice, so I have no problems hearing where improvement can occur.

But be gentle… it’s my first time.

KT