Repudiated by the alien (or Jörmungandr freed)

PHOTO PROMPT © Douglas M. MacIlroy

The alien hears them from his solitary fortress. Violence, sickness, and starvation echo through ruined cities, the rusting rib-cage of the dying world. He has always heard them; from the moment of planet-fall, his super-hearing has been assaulted by humanity’s long screams of suicide. He used to care, before endless pathetic mewling hardened his heart. He used to act, before disgust at savagery overcame empathy. They begged, prayed, demanded help; refusing, unable to help themselves. After a time he stopped caring. Stopped acting. Sitting in his melting castle, he waits for a lasting silence to indicate an end. Extinction. Peace.

Word Count: 99 Another Friday Fictioneers (hosted by ever lovely Rochelle)- where the challenge is to write a story in 100 words or less, inspired by a weekly photo prompt. I saw this one and thought of the Ouroboros, the serpent that bites it own tale. Jörmungandr is the world serpent from Norse mythology, an Ouroboros so large that he encircles the globe – and when he lets go, the world ends. The rest of the stories are available by clicking here. Let me know what you think. Cheers KT


28 thoughts on “Repudiated by the alien (or Jörmungandr freed)

  1. Hi KT,

    Nicely told story, I really like the concept. Just a small thing. I think you might be missing a comma between Violence and Sickness, as well as between assaulted and human. My brain seemed to want to put them in as I read this.

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      1. Thanks mate – the ‘alien’ is pretty obviously modeled on a well known superhero, but I did a ‘what if’ story by mixing and matching personalty traits with Rorschach from Watchmen; namely Rorschach’s deep cynicism and disgust with humanity.

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  2. There’s a scary truth in this – the humans weeping and moaning about a dying earth even as they kill. No wonder the alien can’t find room to care anymore. I can’t decide if “the rusting rib-cage of the dying world” or “assaulted by humanity’s long screams of suicide” is my favorite line.

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  3. The alien’s voice is riveting. His despair and disgust at humanity’s failures are wonderfully shown. To think that he has stopped caring – that someone who could help would stop caring – is horrifying.

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  4. Well done, KT! There are lots of memorable phrases here. I especially like ‘the rusting ribcage of a dying world.’ That’s quite a visual. I feel the alien’s disgust. Nicely written.

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